I think that this is a lot clearer and simpler. It has more focus like this. I would probably redo it slightly but I am happy with this as a visual.
I like the teenage idea. It comes across more strongly simplified I think.
I then had a go at simplifying the Children's war right down using the idea of a chalk board.
I have learnt a lot from going back and having another go at this, but I'm still glad I went through the whole process, I learnt a lot about how to use the computer and manipulate images - all part of the learning process!